2010年5月14日 星期五

Journal 3

The labor education must be taken for freshmen. Although it is zero credit, it is necessary for freshmen. At times I heard that many students complain about labor education. When I started my first semester in the college, I heard of we have to take the labor education. A thought came into my mind at that time, why do we clean out the campus? I assumed that college is different from before, we don’t need to clean the campus anymore. However, maybe I mistake. We have three different parts of labor education in one semester and every part is for a period of six weeks. In the beginning, I didn’t like it because I am lazy do that. I swept outdoor area at noon. There are four people to sweep there together. There is much sun and so hot. The area is not only far but also big of range. It is troublesome. What’s more, I had to get up to clean the campus in the morning. I often didn’t get up on time, not to mention in the winter. It is annoying. However, I am used to labor education and adapt to it now. The labor education remains last part to clean the campus. As the labor education will end this semester also will be over. It is a experience for freshmen.

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  1. We experience sun born every day. :D:D

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  2. Hi Joy

    Well, 有一些語意、文法跟'coherence'的問題要改

    1. The labor education must be taken for freshmen.
    我不知道你想寫什麼................

    2. Although it is zero credit, it is necessary for freshmen.
    把necessary改成 a required course

    3. At times I heard that many students complain about labor education.
    這一句沒有跟上一句或下一句有coherence

    4. When I started my first semester in the college, I heard of we have to take the labor education.
    把of拿掉

    5. A thought came into my mind at that time, why do we clean out the campus?
    用冒號取代逗號
    why do we clean out the campus改why do we have to clean out the campus會順一些

    6. I assumed (這個字用得好!) that college is different from before, we don’t need to clean the campus anymore.
    這兩句的沒有連接詞喔

    7. In the beginning, I didn’t like it because I am lazy do that.
    "I am lazy do that..."這不是英文喔, 請改成英文

    8. I swept outdoor area at noon. There are four people to sweep there together. There is much sun and so hot. The area is not only far but also big of range. It is troublesome. What’s more, I had to get up to clean the campus in the morning.
    你這裡的時態跳來跳去的,若是講一個你生活中要做的習慣或routine而現在也還在做的話,swept要改簡單式, 同理had to改have to
    但若是這個掃地區域跟時段是過去了的,現在沒再做了,那以上全部用過去式

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