Most people are fond of taking pictures. There are some reasons. Some people
just want to retain every wonderful moment of life. The saying goes: The camera never lies. As far as I am concerned, I think there are two different aspects. On one hand, sometimes people don't like the appearance of themselves in the pictures. In order to avoid showing defects after you take the pictures, some people alter the photo to get better. For example, the stars’ pictures always wonderfully show on the magazines. However, the gossip magazine exposes that their face are with wrinkle or they get fat. On the other hand, the photo is true when you record everything of daily life. Although the photos maybe fade when you have retained for a long time, they are still good memories for us. As the time pass quickly, the length of memory have limit.
The pictures can prove that everything about the memory can't change.
Hi happy girl JOY:
回覆刪除You are often quiet in my class. Hope you are doing OK. Here are some suggestions for this journal. Please take a look and do something about them. Thanks.
1. Most people are fond of taking pictures. There are some reasons. 開頭看似OK，但這兩句感覺很生硬的放在這兒，好像兩個不相往來的鄰居，please revise them.
2. In order to avoid showing defects after you take the pictures, some people alter the photo to get better....
第一，改成avoid showing their defects on pictures
第二，the photo是可數名詞，請修改
3. For example, the stars’ pictures always wonderfully show on the magazines. However, the gossip magazine exposes that their face are with wrinkle or they get fat. 請妳傷個腦筋，看如何才能讓這兩句更通順些。
4. Although the photos maybe fade when you have retained for a long time請把maybe改成may，順便查一下maybe最適合的位置; 把when改成after; retained需要一個受詞
5. they are still good memories for us可改成: they still hodl those good memories for us
6. As the time pass quickly, the length of memory have limit. 請對pass做個處理
7. The pictures can prove that everything about the memory can't change. 你的ending不是很順暢，please edit it or replace it with a more appropriate one.
Good luck