People are fond of taking a trip to everywhere. There are two ways for trips. Backpacking travel, it means that someone tours with backpack. Tour travel trip,
It means guided tour. When you make a comparison of them, you will find they have distinction between them and several similarities.
The backpacking travel and Tour travel trip have similar in some parts. At first
every countries is different from conditions of cities. So the public security is bad or
good that is also different. But wherever you go, some places are dangerous especially at night. For example, subway, park and so on. You must be careful with
the robber.
Second, you can enjoy the journey with healthy body. So It is important for people who usually have trips to maintain the body in the optimum condition.
In addition to some similar, there are some different parts. For instance,
the backpacking travel can feel more local condition and cultures of countries.
When you go to scenic spots, it doesn’t limit to stay there for length of time.
That differs from tour travel trip.
Another different part is tour travel trip: you don’t deal with kinds of problems,
for example, public transportation, board, lodging etc. Even though you don’t have
good language ability for communication, the tour guide will help you.
No matter backpacking travel or tour travel trip, they are different experience
for you.
The thesis statement is nice. YOu have pointed out the topic and also made your readers know this article is going to be a comparison-contrast piece. Also, the article structure in general followed the block organization. You did it well.
回覆刪除However, to make your writing better, you need to examine the following mistakes I found.
Firstly, I'm not sure what you were trying to say in your point 2 that 'you can enjoy the journey with healthy body.' You need to rephrase it.
Secondly, you need to place a 'noun or noun phrase' after the phrase 'in addition to'
Finally, careless mistakes like 'every countries' in line 8 shoud be avoided.
By the way, it would be helpful if you could make the format of the article more 'tidy'.
Regarding the format, you may learn from Nina:
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